Friday, April 24, 2009

rain falls

the rain falls
the river flows
wider greener
hitting the surface
it bubbles, knicks, and splashes across
trees bending over
hanging low and heavy
dancing and crying with the rain
the sky clears
everything still and dark
the bright clear moon
turns purple and falls
bringing stars down with it
sounging just like the rain
on the roof of a pavilion
the spring peepers in the swanp
singing their hearts out
all the unknown voices
calling to someone
any one
just asking to be heard.

um yea tell me what ya think! i was thinking about moving the purple one after the green but not sure so...


2 comments:

Michelle said...

That's really good! I love the personification.

Michelle said...

Yeah I think you might want to swap the green one with the purple one, and then add something at the end of it to finish it off. That would make it seem more in the right order.